Eek, I can't believe I didn't see this before! It's absolutely lovely-- I love how you characterize White, and the hints of her past in lines like White's real life is, has always been, in the tunnels. And I really love the mental image of White growing up as a part of the subway. I also love this line a ton: White rides without reaching for a handhold, bending her knees and shifting her weight to accommodate for the turns and rattles that she knows by heart. It's great characterization and a just plain gorgeous sentence, too.
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Eek, I can't believe I didn't see this before! It's absolutely lovely-- I love how you characterize White, and the hints of her past in lines like White's real life is, has always been, in the tunnels. And I really love the mental image of White growing up as a part of the subway. I also love this line a ton: White rides without reaching for a handhold, bending her knees and shifting her weight to accommodate for the turns and rattles that she knows by heart. It's great characterization and a just plain gorgeous sentence, too.
Basically, great job!